If ghosts could kill themselves, they would. They long to be either here or there. Bodiless but not yet dimensionless light, they darken like shadows the houses they lived in. My dead twin brother finds ways to tell me he’s still half-with us, and I more than half believe him. Ghost stories have it all wrong. Rattling chains aren’t threats or warnings; they’re diplomatic feelers from the nearly departed. So far, he’s dropped hints about the gun I helped him buy, about his accidental death, and about the novel he was writing, but not enough to pull it all together. With my clean record, my legitimate ID, and a photo of the face we share, I secured a license to arm ourselves against what I never knew, but it helped him sleep, and so it helped me, too. He’d gotten it in his head that his foot was diseased, or menacing in a way that his chapter drafts don’t specify. In the garden at dusk, he aimed down the barrel with single-eyed intensity, fired one shot, and severed the pinkie toe, then laughed at what he called my much ado. He got it in his head that we were triplets next and aimed at me in turn, calling me the one in the middle before he fired. Lonely as Adam, I dug a hole that seeped a bit and laid him in damp earth, then filled it alone. I meant to write that it pains the ghost to haunt the living, but it doesn’t ring true. This note I found in his own hand, which looks so much like mine, bears no hint of anguish or remorse. There is no twin, it says, the novel has always been mine, and who will bury you now that you’ve killed me?
Copyright © November 24, 2006

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November 25, 2006 at 3:37 pm
litlove
Oh I love this one. The uncanny speaks to me so strongly at the moment, while I’m writing about it. I really appreciate the doubling being a form of both immortality and innate deathliness. Very sharp and intricate.
Thank you, litlove. Sometimes they start out simple and, short as they are, I can’t keep them simple all the way through. Glad it appealed to you.
–David
November 25, 2006 at 10:20 pm
briseis
This short novel is fantastic, David. Absolutely wonderful.
Thank you, briseis. Now I know I’ve done something right.
–David
All of your work is fantastic, David! My comments or compliments are poor indicators.
We miss you at blogster!
Is there an emoticon for “blushing”?
–David
I suppose there is, somewhere, but I don’t know it.
November 27, 2006 at 7:36 pm
LK
That’s about as good a first sentence as any I’ve read.
And that’s about as good a compliment as I could hope for. Thank you, LK.
–David
November 27, 2006 at 8:24 pm
mystic rose
Love it! short and spooky, what makes u think u killed ur twin, er, yourself?
U had 2 go and use the L word! Thank u, and, btw, ur welcome any time.
–David
November 28, 2006 at 2:09 am
secretagentartist
‘He got it in his head his foot was dead, or menacing…’ love this line! A little bit dada.
Thanks, secret. God and my toothbrush are dada.
–David
November 28, 2006 at 7:09 am
Annelisa
Excellent!
I had a suspicion the twin that died was the author, or part of the author. But, it’s the author who was shot, was it not? So, is it the ghost who’s writing, and being? And did the author watch as the twin grew old and died? Oh, so many questions from such a concentrated source….
You might want to mix it with water. Thanks, Annelisa!
–David
Oh, but David, your blog is already such a tonic – it would be a disaster to dilute it!
I love the line “Rattling chains aren’t lamentations, they’re diplomatic feelers from the nearly departed” by the way.
I’m still trying to work out who died, who didn’t, or if anyone did…
I’ll come back when I’m over my flu…
Flu or not, this one confounds most explications.
–David
November 28, 2006 at 10:19 am
mystic rose
is the l word forbidden here? 🙂 i know..its over used..but i liked what i read a lot.
By no means forbidden. Feel free to love expressly and express your love freely. Share it with friends!
–David
November 28, 2006 at 2:59 pm
twinkies
Great words, very spooky, fantastic reading.
Thank you, twinkies. I’m starting to think this one works.
–David
November 28, 2006 at 11:00 pm
red-dirt-girl
I stopped by looking for ‘inspiration’ and what do I find but a dead author . . . not so subtle – eh? Maybe we could put my poem Diagnosis as the ‘trailer’ before your main show here . . . since we both somehow ended up in dirt!
I certainly didn’t mean to discourage you!
–David
November 29, 2006 at 3:24 pm
Shahrzad
hi there,
wow…it’s the first time I’m reading your stories…they seem interesting.
Wish you the best.
–Shahrzad
Hi, there, Shahrzad. Glad you’re interested. Stop back again soon.
–David
December 1, 2006 at 2:10 pm
M. Shahin
Whoa! This takes the ghost story and turns it upside down and makes it a little bit more disturbing, and that is just the way I like it. It is a “killer” story. I better keep a lookout on my sisters 😉
Family members are always likely suspects. Thanks, mshahin.
–David
December 2, 2006 at 4:53 pm
nova
I love this one! So much in so few words… truly fantastic.
I’ve just come from your web page, nova, where you tell the story of your own double! It must have been a bit creepy to come upon this story while you’re dealing with a “twin” of your own. Thank you for your very kind compliment.
–David
David, I was thinking the exact same thing. It’s been one weird day.
December 8, 2006 at 2:52 pm
Daniel
David,
That is a great story. I need to read your blog far more often than I do.
Wow. Thanks, Daniel. You’re welcome any time, and to entice you to return, there’s something new every few days. But maybe you have to work your way through the 30 or so stories in the archives first.
–David
December 12, 2006 at 11:51 pm
yzed
…like sadness on a winter’s evening.
Mm-hmm.
–David
April 2, 2007 at 10:13 pm
Maxwell Baig
I feel like I should write a paper on it and yet I’m still confused. It’s a lot to take in and I’m a young kid, so I’ll ask my English teacher.
Cool.
-max
Way cool.
–David
January 16, 2016 at 5:01 am
shivansh
Nice